Wednesday 28 March 2012

Assignment #7 - Critical Thinking


Have you ever read a novel and wanted to change something that happened in one of the chapters, or the outcome of the story?  If you answered yes to this question, then you are in luck!  This is your chance to change something from your novel.  Think back to what happened at the end of the story (or a specific section of your novel) and ask yourself these questions when rewriting it: 

1.) What would you change about the story?
2.) Why would you change it?
3.) How will the change affect the story?  
4.) Will it change the plot of the story drastically?  
5.) What questions do you have after changing what happened?  

13 comments:

  1. One part in Iqbal I would like to change was when Iqbal came back with the police but they gave him back to the master Hussain Khan instead of arresting him for having children as slaves and treating them terribly like their animals which is not nice. What I would like to change about it is this: As the police were talking to master Hussain Khan jacob was fighting with the mistress yelling and screaming. The police heard him and came rushing in and asked what was wrong, Jacob answered by screaming " The other children are in the tomb their in the tomb." As the police went to go check, Jacob was just sitting waiting to them to come back with the master and mistress standing behind him yelling at each other. When the police came back the children were stumbling behind them. The police took the master and mistress away but left the children alone in the house with nothing. They spent the night there, and waited for a long time until finally the police came to take the children to there homes.
    That was how I would change it but if this happened it would change the book drastically and it would be way different. But how would the police now how to find their family and what would happen would any of the kids stay friends? This is how I would change that part of the novel.

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      One part in Iqbal I would like to change was when Iqbal came back with the police but they gave him back to the master Hussain Khan instead of arresting him for having children as slaves and treating them terribly like their animals which is not nice. What I would like to change about it is this: As the police were talking to master Hussain Khan Iqbal was fighting with the mistress yelling and screaming. The police heard him and came rushing in and asked what was wrong, Iqbal answered by screaming " The other children are in the tomb their in the tomb." As the police went to go check, Iqbal was just sitting waiting to them to come back with the master and mistress standing behind him yelling at each other. When the police came back the children were stumbling behind them. The police took the master and mistress away but left the children alone in the house with nothing. They spent the night there, and waited for a long time until finally the police came to take the children to there homes.
      That was how I would change it but if this happened it would change the book drastically and it would be way different. But how would the police now how to find their family and what would happen would any of the kids stay friends? This is how I would change that part of the novel.

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    2. Great job Amy! Also good work for catching the part where you mixed up the names Jacob and Iqbal, also you have done a great revised version. Keep up the good work!

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  2. Something I would change in this book, is when the police came to give the master Iqbal back. I would change it by: When the cops come to Hussain Khan's house, Iqbal explains what Hussain Khan has done to all the kids, and shows the cops everything, including the other slaves. Then, because of all the horrible things the master had done, the police decided that they need to arrest him. After that, the cops would return each and every slave back to their family, where they can be happy and safe.

    I would change this, because I think it would be much better for the children, and Hussain Khan deserves to go to jail for what he has done. I think this might change the plot drastically, because the story might even be shorter if it happened. A few questions I would have would be:
    How long would Hussain Khan be in jail? Would the kids ever see each other again? How far away would the kids be from each other? Did the police arrest any other masters of slaves?

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  3. One part in Iqbal is when he comes to the police mens headquarters the police men will believe Iqbal and they will arrest the master Hussain Khan for breaking the new law but before they arrest Hussain he starts yelling at Iqbal. After Hussain is taken away Iqbal takes the police men to the factory where his friends still work in orders of the mistress, soon she is arrested and put in jail along with her husband for all the cruelty done to the kids. They also look inside the tomb to make sure their is no one inside before it's locked down for good. this the part I would change in this novel.

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    1. I thought you had a very good part you would like to change and the way you changed it, but I have a question why didn't the mistress go to jail with the master since she was there with Iqbal and the master ? Anyway good job and keep up the great work.

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    2. Amy the question you asked was good, but they way I put it was Iqbal was at the poloice man station where hussein was arrested then they went to the house and the mistress was there so she was arrested soon after.

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  4. one part in iqbal that i wish i could change was when Iqbal got shot by this man in a black car and when this happend in the book i was really sad. And what made it sad was when they found his body on the ground . that part was the sadiest because they never found who did it. and if i could change the story i would have said they did find him and he was put in jail. the reason why i would change it is because if the message that i'm trying to get out could be heard and people can try and save the kids who are living in Iqbals life.

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  5. One part in the book that I would change would be where Iqbal ripped his carpet. I would make it go like after he did that he got locked up with the numskulls, and forced to make a new carpet in 24 hours or it's GAME OVER. I would change it to make more interesting for the reader.

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    1. Some things you need to work on are:

      1.) Add more details to what would happen.

      2.) You need to come up with some questions you would ask if the book was like that.

      Overall, great job! :)

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    2. The thing that makes a book interesting is if there is a mystery and where i said or it's game over, you don't know whats going to happen, if he's going to get killed or if he's family is going to get killed or if he'll have to watch the numskulls getting tortured.

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  6. One part in the book Iqbal that i want to change is when Iqbal is being tortured (slavery) and does all these jobs that he probably cant even do and barely gets money.(The change)- The way that i would change about the story is if Iqbal worked less and Hussein giving the people working more money that the people expect and have enough money to buy food for their families or others. This would change the whole story because Hussein actually gave them enough money to buy food and clothes not like before that he gave them muucchh more work.

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    1. Tony one thing you could do is capitalize all the I's and beside the word the change you put - I don't know if that was an accident but maybe fix them and good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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